What do think of my poem, please answer?

-As she danced through her dream

She silently questioned their reaction

And why the other glass would mirror her

She quietly stood by and watched

The follower and opheliac

She twirled and spun

Along with the patterns on her back

Only listening to the ring of bells

And paying no attention to their eyes

That would never open to see

Or hear her roar her tiny roar

The wind would carry her

Above the oak and beyond the forest

And she would watch them skin the animals

And make their bandages

But her mind never once wandered

From the boat that kept rowing

Or the snake that kept hissing

They dared her to look down once more

And she watched as they pinned her wings to the wall



would you buy a book with this type of writting in it?I would buy it if there was more content, as a fellow poet, I think this is brilliant with the exception of "Hear her roar her tiny roar", it doesn't sound right, probably because you have repeated "her roar" twice, other than that, brilliant :)
I love the imagery here. Good piece! Keep writing and I hope to see u in the Poetry Castle



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yes.......................and no