What do you think of my poem or rap or whatever?

-Time is a room, I wonder through the years

I find pain in every corner, ceiling full of fear

Floors are just a hole, and walls are only clear

Reminds myself, every time I drop a tear

It hits the floor, and my mind is walking out of the door

I've lost it, gone crazy I stay exhausted

Stuck in this room of time, I think it's haunted

But all along, it's you I've wanted

I don't know why it is I lose sleep at night

I cry in sadness, It wont even leave me breathing right

Highway to heaven, lord I know I see the lights

I want to see myself happy, but some things are out of sight

This is a fair warning, proceed with caution

Sold my soul to you, you bought it in an auction

Pain has me drinking all kinds of concoctions

Cupid shot his darts, he must have been a marksmanthats very very good!