This is my poem i wrote. Is it any good?

-i know its fake

but im scared to awake

to the burning ache

of this painful feeling

something that is not heeling

it hides in my chest

sitting and depressed

feeling possessed

unable to rest

is it stress?

am i a mess?











(its short lol i know!)omg ! i personally think thats amazinggg !! next dr seuss right there ! ;)Dig deeper. I'm a teen, too. 14. Try not telling the reader what you are talking about in the piece too quick. Like this,

- Feels unreal,

it must be.

A feeling nobody

is able to see.

Stressed,

yet doubtful about what I really feel.

Unable to identify what it is.

Most unfortunate, unable to heal.-

Something like that, you know. I wrote it too quick, couldn't think of anything. :P
no. it's not.

read walt whitman's leaves of grass

e.e. cummings

edgar allen poe

adrienne rich



that's good poetry.

i'm guessing you're barely a teen? you have time to improve.
Poems and all other need meaning. This is about you depressed. No inner meaning. You need to be able to read a poem and work out the true meaning of it rather than the layer on top.
No. Just no.
um it's very basic, i wouldn't say it's anything great..
It has no rhyme scheme...So, in that sense childish. But, It is very nice and it expresses you're feelings!
no.