POEM TIIIIIMMMEE!!!!!!! YAAAA :D?

-Heeeey i wrote 3 poems all about the same thing but i want to know witch one people think is the best. Can you please read them and tell me witch is your favorit and why? =D Thank you!!!!!



-JEALOUSY-(poem)



When i dig my two graves

Who says the second ones for me?

Because your not the one im after

You alone, is not enough

She's the one that started this

The one that made me cry

So when i dig my two graves

Who says they have to be together?

You two together is what started this whole mess

So the graves shall be far apart

Never to see each others faces

nor the light of day



-GOODBYE- (poem)



One day you'll see

That i was way better than she

But now you'll never know

'Cause im on the go

You'll go on, not finding the one

And then just quit, when your done

So i hope you'll be happy with her

'Cause shure,

Your happy now

But when you two brake-up

I wont say "wow"



-HAPPY NOW-(poem)



So now i know to go

But i just want to let you know

I'm really happy now

This is when you look at me in disgusts,

And say 'how?'

Well,

I'm really happy now,

i dont have to look at you everyday day,

just to say 'whats wrong now'

I'm really happy now,

i dont have to walk with you,

acting like i cared about what you said

I'm really happy now,

i dont have to stand their,

waiting in the middle of nowhere

So see?

I'm really happy now,

i dont have to deal with you



OH, can you not pick the one that rhymes only because it rhymes. Thank you :DI feel my favorite is the first one, JEALOUSY because it gives the most emotion in my opinion. it is the most beautiful because you feel the pain you felt when you wrote it and you feel your presence in it. It is just beautiful, as are all of them , but that is my favorite along with my second happy now.



GREAT JOB!!! YOU'RE TRULY AMAZING!!!!I had to read Happy now, i ain't got finished.It has no essence, but rhymes.First started sober to me, second childish, the last needs more passion and heart.It's pretty hard to become an artist, even to write some lyrics, keep trying, get your best to poetry.
I like the last one best I suppose. It was the least contradicting and made the most sense.