I wrote a free verse...?

-Given for arguing

Done in silence

Walk to solitude and dirty looks

I don't belong here

I read the Bible looking for an answer

Am I too megar to comprehend it?



It speaks of great evils, and great goods

It spoke of the creation of Earth, life, prosperity

It tells of the holy family, and the unforgivable sin



I look up from my book

students of all ages and sizes

I turn to the supervisor

Orange hair

Colts necklace

I blush

I feel like a criminal

doing unbearable time

I look back at my tomb of holy light

The Bible



I flip to the book of David, Seeking advice

RING!

The orange haired man tells me to leave

I never want to be here again

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What do you guys think?I imagine this as a rap, hahhah. Too much listening to eminem. I think it is slightly incomprehensible as a normal poem, but would be amazing as a rap. Btw, you spelt meagre wrong.a bit too long..makes it a bit un interesting..
What the ****, it doesn't even rhyme! This is bullshit.
Its not my cup of tea but I think its pretty good;ok