Can you please honestly rate my songwriting skills?

-Out of control is the songs name. Rate of of 10 with 10 being the BEST! This kinda has a disco, techno beat to it and like kinda euro-pop with the chorus.



When i saw you the very first time

knew your the one i will always want

Turned me sweet sugar from bitter lime

All thanks to you and your magic wand



Touch of magic is what you possessed

And now all over theirs burning sparks

Surrounding us like colorful fireworks

This love has ignited burning hot



All around all over out of control

Sparks and fireworks flying up up up

Blind by the light I look like a fool

Our love is on fire burnin up up up



Holding your hand taking a stroll

I think i hit the jackpot i hit gold

Our secrets are starting to unfold

And our loves going out of control



Out of control and all crazy

Baby doll cant you see

Our hearts are attaching

It was always meant to be

Cause your the girl controlling me

Love you forever you'll see



Touch of magic is what you possessed

And now all over theirs burning sparks

Surrounding us like colorful fireworks

This love has ignited burning hot



All around all over out of control

Sparks and fireworks flying up up up

Blind by the light I look like a fool

Our love is on fire burnin up up up



Going Wild and traveling fast

Through our veins and hearts

This magic elixir is replenishing us

Like glue it attached our hearts



And now we can be true to our selfish desires

Out of control feeling sweetness gone higher

I'll be the fireman controlling our love only for her

Cause shes the one making me out of control

And for ever on she will always be my baby girl



Touch of magic is what you possessed

And now all over theirs burning sparks

Surrounding us like colorful fireworks

This love has ignited burning hot



Baby girl going out of control

Controlling fast and going to heart

The heart beat rhythm is about to start

Starting wild and beating loud and hard



All around all over out of control

Sparks and fireworks flying up up up

Blind by the light I look like a fool

Our love is on fire burnin up up upGreat Job!

I will not rate it because what do I know? I just know the words flow great and I can see this being made into a hit.

Continue on with your journey.Very good but the theme is not good

everyone is doin lovesong

i like song which is related to our daily life.

I give u 7/10
you seem to be all over the place. stick to one theme. you need work
Not bad, but it seems that u can do better. keep writing



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