What 'not me' c/c for "I Still Ain't Got Over Saturday Night!!!" poem, maybe?

-Oh no you DID...NOT!

You can say you did all

the blezing hell you want,

but boo-tee be right here

and says you DID!



Had a great big grin

on and everything.

Done fooled me up,

down, sideways, and



perpendicular!



You did NOT bring me flowers at the door last night!

Don't matter a neighbor saw you....cataracts.

You did NOT say you were glad to see me at the door!

Neighbor got a hearing aid.

You did NOT open that car door....you never did NONE of all that!

Why I don't believe you when it's true?

Cause I'd have to have a heart attack,

and I want to keep going like we are,



so I can enjoy everything you doing now

a

long

time.Cajun liquor is hot sauce with attitude. Now the question is how many shots did you take last night? lolGood Morning

...I was not there to hear the charm

just stay off the grass...don't cause me alarm

off the shoulder

of the road kill.....don't you ever say

I cared more

for the foundation built before the stormy weather

now...come here

and kiss me

fool!
I love the way you at times move into dialect and regional speaking, I mean I feel it bein spoken, it makes a piece very real for me.
control freak!

*folds arms*

mmm hmm
Hi. Very sad and poignant poem, i can see that you are hurting , these are some very strong words, they show disappointments , and regrets , you have in a certain person. You deserve a red rose for your pain , i will mail it to you. You painted a vivid picture words so your readers may glimpsed this vision







This is brilliant and very clear, some men like to play a fool sometimes, always wanting to try all of the flavor's of the ice cream with out a clue of what they want, It's just vanity of the heart.



Nice poem Elysbeth. Thank for posting. And thanks for BA in your last poem. T.C.