Is this an acceptable Poem for an ending relationship?

-I have NEVER wrote a poem before.. and i really just feel torn apart about a relationship going downhill.

So, these words just came in mind and i wrote them down and i want to send to her.

Should I?

(Yes i know its HORRIBLE lol, probably not even a poem just a bundled mess.)



Your name does nothing but Torment my Mind.

Just Pain, a Dagger from Behind.

Living day by day, just waiting for you to say.

That you loved me, and everything was okay.

Reminiscing of the old times.

Seeing us stop at a drop of a dime.

I hate the feelings of us being apart.

But no matter what, you remain in my heart.Hi dear friend , i'm so sorry the relationship didn't work out. This i a nice touching and poignant poem it really touched my heart, you wrote a vivid picture words of how you feel touching our emotions and our heart. You took your readers to vision this pain. Wish her the best on moved on in time when you are heal, you will one day find that special person God have for you. Brilliant poem i like it a lot. Take care.I personally love it. And don't worry about it being a "bundled mess", poetry is about expressing your feelings through writing, not about having it look pretty.





p.s. I'm sorry to hear about the problems you're having with you're girlfreind. Just remember: Giving up doesn't always mean you are weak; sometimes it means that you are strong enough to let go.
Your poem helps you but it wont do anything for her, if she is done then she is done. When one has no emotional interest you can write a zillion poems but she has signed off. Time to move on.
Dude, listen to spiritualized song called broken heart and give it to yer ex.
It's a lovely poem but you're better off to end it by talking to her and being direct.
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