I'm not sure about this, can you pretty please comment and give me some feedback?

-Fallow

Lovely green hills,

And shinning pastures

With ribbons of radiant colors

And many months

And seasons.

They all seem so wonderful,

And all so unique,

With each one possessing

An intoxicating radiance,

An overwhelming presence,

Of grace and beauty.

It provides us with comfort,

And quiet joy,

Where we can submit to

Ultimate confession

And respite.

Yet the trees seem bare,

Emotionless,

Too clutched in their web of despair

To show their thoughts or conceit.

The meadows all bare

Delightful fruits and offers

A much bountiful crop;

Though the destruction

Of mortal pursuit

Leaves the land fallow

In heart and spirit.

Listen to the silence

And smell the breezes.

Do they not provide you

With a sense of sadness,

A sense of humility?

When shall these beings

Of venal character

Who extinguish all life,

Close in conclusion

Of their blunders?

When will these beings

Of venal character,

Who extinguish all life,

Cease to mar the perfection,

Of these lovely green hills

And shinning pastures?



What do you think of it? I'm kinda new at poetry and stuff and I'm not that good at it yet, so feedback would be really helpful!!!!!!sometimes in poetry it is better to wieve in the good and the bad together rather then going staight from good to bad let it pour from the heart but i think your poem is lovely and to say your just starting you should be proud of yourself there are no strikct rite or wrongs with poetry you really have just got to let it pour from the heart x
don't say your not good! that's calling my poems awful xD your poem is amazing and really captures ones attention. I can not believe you are new to this! Really well done! I am envious, you have a lot of talent! Please keep writing! :D