How does my poem sound?

-No longer will I be in pain, or have to be alone

Because now I'm six feet under a black tombstone聽

When I was alive, I lived in a small shell

The world was cruel to me and gave me hell

I was not loved, the looked down on me

Because I was not gorgeous, I was ugly

They laughed at me, and made fun of my weight

This could have been stopped, but it was too late

The blood was everywhere, and my soul was free

No I can't be hurt, they had to let myself beFrom the standpoint of writing the poem has flaws(but don't come after me, I'm allergic to gunfire!) And besides everybody has flaws, what counts is how you deal with them. 2nd line "Because now I'm six feet under--under a black tombstone(flows better)5th line "I was not loved, they(spelling) looked down on me" 6th line Because I was not gorgeous, I was pretty(juxtaposition) ugly(and flows better)(again please don't come after me, I'm trying to help!)---You were on a roll but then line10 'No I can't be hurt, they had to let me be(sounds and flows better)--All in all not a bad emo effort, some promise here, but needs a title-- suggestion "Slewicide Note"---Keep Writing--wherever you are!-----------------william
I'm just astounded you got an internet connection six feet under.
A little scary dont you think?? Maybe make it more cheerfull? But, overall its GOOD and true and happens in life!!! Keep on writing poems! YOUR GOOD!
OMG IT'S AMAZING ;D but fix the first line in the 3rd stanza to "they" instead of "the". GREAT JOB THOUGH