Can you please have a read of my poem and see what you think?

-Golden Mean



Golden mean, Golden sneers, Golden spits

Golden child takes all and Golden hits

'til child sleeps and screams in Golden fits

while new born baby sucks Golden t'ts

tossing dreams into deep Golden pits

and watches hungry through Golden slits

as father tears lives to Golden bits

Go now and run child while Golden sits

'cause you will die before Golden quits



What are your thoughts? Feedback? I might put some of my others up if you think that's a good idea. In the (golden) mean time, what did you think of it? Any good?Needs work.
It could use a little more work.

Not to be harsh
its very good, could you put some more up